How do you write a good description for your novel?

From what I’ve gathered, your first sentence has to draw the readers in. You need to be to the point without giving too much of the plot away. You have to make readers want to pick that book up, so you have to use strong wording (so, nothing like “yeah, and they kinda fell in love”). It should be short so that you don’t lose the reader’s interest before they even get to chapter one.

I am very bad at writing descriptions. If I plan on publishing by the end of the summer, I need to get my shit together. Here are some of my attempts.

King Xenos has a heart cold as ice from a childhood curse, so how is it that he is the only one who could save Princess Johara? Johara thinks there must be a mistake when Xenos takes her north to be his queen, but they are wed as man and wife and the rest of her life must be spent living in a gloomy castle with a cold husband.

However, things might not all be as they appear. Xenos’s passion is nothing close to cold, and Johara knows there is more to his curse than he’s telling her.
Will Johara turn to ice when pressured with the cold, or will Xenos set her heart aflame?

I think it captures the essence of Kiss of The Fey pretty well, but I don’t know if it would draw readers in.

Princess Johara expected it to be a knight in shining armor that came to her rescue, but what she got was a cursed man in black.

King Xenos hadn’t planned on saving Johara, but now that he had he would wed her and make her his queen.

Johara must go north and live in the freezing kingdom of Malum, where crime is rampant and there are no laws or order. Confined to the gloomy castle, Johara has no choice but to spend time with Xenos, who seems oddly reluctant to spend time with her.

Johara realizes that Xenos’s curse might not be what it appears. He’s keeping something from her, something that might cost him his life. Can she save him in time, or will all of Malum be lost?

Basically I’m really bad at writing descriptions. I think this is a universal thing and everyone is equally bad, but I need to get my shit together so that I have something usable to stick by my book and put on the back cover.

Here is what I had way back when this was on Fictionpress:

A cursed king seemingly as cold as the ice flowing through his veins. A princess chosen to produce an heir. As she unearths the truth behind the dark rumors surrounding her groom, will she find more darkness? Or something to set her heart aflame?

Anyone have any opinions?

If you want to support a starting author, you can follow the “Charlotte Cyprus” tab to my author blog and follow that to keep track of when I publish (there will be much fewer posts there, they’ll only be about publishing and such).

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